peer review

My peer review was done by Sharon.
my strengths/weaknesses
1) can see progression throughout the story.
I can work on my detail and expression throughout the progression of the story.
2) clear section changes.
Elaborate more on my feelings about quitting and what helped me pull through.
3) Lesson is clear.
Add something towards the end to tie in with the lesson.

I will use the peer review to help me clean up the ending and tie it into the lesson more and not make it so confusing and end so quickly.