strong: 1) introduction: i felt this was strong because i was clear and gave good detail about the hero's life before his calling
2) paragraph 4 (crossing the threshold): i felt i gave good detail on all the experiences when he crossed the threshold into the new world
weak: 1) 2nd paragraph: i feel i could more detail about his calling and introduce and something the lesson
2) last paragraph: i could use more detail, but could get help from the revision of paragraph 2.
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